Kia ora
Here is the recount I wrote for an Asttle writing test in Week 4. Our teacher marked all our recounts and gave us our scores. Mine came out at Level 2p which is just below the end of year standard for Year Five. I need to work on punctuation and spelling. I got the best score for sentence structure.
Then we helped each other to improve them by reading each other’s recount and talking about them. We also used Revision Assistant to help edit each other’s story and Mrs B added some notes as well. Everyone in our room likes Revision Assistant because it’s easy to understand the marks notes that it puts on your writing and so it’s quick for us to go and do the fix-ups. We have to make our stories perfect in spelling, grammar and punctuation before we are allowed to publish them here.
Ka kite ano
“Yahoo! "I said ."We're going to Paihia."
"Get your gear," Mum said. Aunty Jag,Uncle Pete,Alexis,Papa Joe,Nana T, Ben and my bigger cousin
were waiting for us at the beach.
"I’ve got my gear, "I said .
" OK, go put it in the car, “said Dad. "Let’s go."
When we got to Paihia we parked by the park were our aunty Was “Can we play on the park ?" I asked Mum.
"Yep, " she said. I took my cousin Alexis, my brother,sisters and bigger cousin on the park to play. “Let’s play tag, " my big cousin Autumn said but I said, "I’m going for a swim".
" Ohh, " she said ."I’m coming too then .Let's go get our togs ."
After a little while we had kai."Kids, it's time to go home now, "the adults said. " We will stop at the shop and get an ice block."
"Mum, can I go stay at Aunty's house? " I asked.
She said, "Yep."
I felt tired at the end of the day .
Hi bailey its royston I like Your post and how you have explained every thing that people need to know.
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